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We are currently living in a government assisted apartment with 3 bedrooms 1 bath central heat and air, and new windows. The rooms are very small and with 2 daughters (14 and 7) we are very cramped. I recently found a brick house for rent in an area where I have been really wanting to move to. It is very close to both my mother and our church. The school district is the same but just a different school. My oldest daughter will be starting high school next year and the high school is the same. My youngest daughter will have to change schools, but she really wants to anyway. The girls and I looked at the house and fell in LOVE with it and desperately want to move there. It is a 2 bedroom 1 bath country house with a big kitchen, bigger bedrooms big living room and a den (that we can use as master bedroom) Utility room a big yard, barn for kids to play in a carport and an additional 2 car barn, pets are allowed has a range celling fans in every room and a trampoline that stays with house. Only hang-ups are electric wall heaters and old but sturdy windows. The big hang-up is that my husband does not like to pay RENT, He would rather make a house payment so we could own a house instead of paying to live in someone else's house. But if they decide to sell we will have 1st option to buy. Well he says we can't afford it anyway the rent is $400 a month (which I believe is really great.) like I said right now we live in a government assisted apartment,no pets, no place for girls to play, their bikes got stolen, have to pay to do laundry($60 a month) have electric and gas bills and $144 rent verses $400 a month rent just electric bill and our own washer and dryer. He is disabled and receives $710 a month we get food stamps and I am working for his mother at her cake shop.My feeling is that we can't afford not to move.
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Your husband according to your previous question from 6 months ago is very overweight and does nothing all day but eat. You mean to say this man who gets free food, free disability, free rent has an issue about throwing away money on rent? No way your family is purchasing a home anytime soon. Not with a man who doesn't work because of a disability caused by his own lack of control. I don't mean to sound cynical but, I don't see how he has any place making a fuss about paying rent when you guys barely pay anything right now, thanks to your fellow tax payers.
If buying a home is a priority for him, he needs to do something about his health and get your entire family off all forms of public assistance. Since that is not happening anytime soon, I would say rent the home. They don't give mortgages to people who don't have a down payment saved up. And he cannot have a big savings account if he wants to keep his disability check.
Your husband according to your previous question from 6 months ago is very overweight and does nothing all day but eat. You mean to say this man who gets free food, free disability, free rent has an issue about throwing away money on rent? No way your family is purchasing a home anytime soon. Not with a man who doesn't work because of a disability caused by his own lack of control. I don't mean to sound cynical but, I don't see how he has any place making a fuss about paying rent when you guys barely pay anything right now, thanks to your fellow tax payers.
If buying a home is a priority for him, he needs to do something about his health and get your entire family off all forms of public assistance. Since that is not happening anytime soon, I would say rent the home. They don't give mortgages to people who don't have a down payment saved up. And he cannot have a big savings account if he wants to keep his disability check.
What do you think of my story so far?
Alexis
This is a different piece of writing, by the way. I've been writing a story and I would like to know if it's pretty good so far. I like criticism but I would prefer you say something nice about my writing and then give me your complaints. I am young too so I'm not as well taught in writing (My school rarely teaches writing skills). Anyhow, here's my a piece of my writing:
I stared out to the city to people and their robot companions. Most were walking around the city shopping around, some were driving on their electric cars to their work. The nation seemed to progress everyday. I am Callum Ophichui, the president of the United States.
The United States used to be different, according to my grandfather. Heâd always talk about how the 2000âs were some great times. Heâd talk about the government, the technology, and basic life. Heâd always say that it was harder to become the president and that I was lucky to have such a high rank. My grandfather would always talk about the people that he knew and how they werenât as lazy as the people now. They didnât have robots, they had themselves. The later
presidents and I did a good job running the United States, if I do say so myself.
âPresident Ophichui,â Luna, my robot secretary started. âOne of the scientists in the lab wanted you. Itâs about the robots.â An angry look was on her face. I turned around around from the window to see her.
âWhatâs wrong? Youâre mad?â I asked her. She came to me and pushed me onto the chair next to where I was standing, pinning me.
âWhat are you planning to do with us? I heard you talking with Vice President Xandrell about robots.â she grumbled. I smirked at her, raising my eyebrows.
âIt was nothing, you and your people are fine, Luna. Now let me go, I need to go talk to the scientists.â I pushed her away from as she pouted. I walked away from her and out of the oval office to the science lab. Dr. Fischer had been standing by the doorway waiting for me.
âPresident Callum! Iâm glad you are here. I would like to talk about the production of robots,â he invited me inside the robot production center. He led me towards a hologram computer, showing me a scan on a robot-humanâs brain.
âSomething in the frontal lobe section of the brain is triggering the robots to act a little weird.â he said. âThereâs been some cases with them even murdering people. We think we found the answer to that and we need you to authorize it.â What Dr Fischer didnât understand was that this was all apart of my plan. When I was small and still in school, I used to get bullied since I was your normal nerdy type of kid. I was a huge teacherâs pet and I used to always get the best grades. I didnât really have any friends because in our school, no one cared about their work, only me. Their main goal in school was to be popular and bully the nerdy ones. I still remember the threats they used to say to me and I still have most of the scars from their pushing and punching. All these things got worse once I graduated middle school and wanted to run for president. Once I won the elections, I wanted revenge on all the people who hurt me. I may not remember their faces exactly but I know my robots will find them. The downside is that my plan is backfiring and hurting the other citizens which wasnât really what I intended. I donât know which exact robot belongs to the bullies so there is no way I can stop what these robots are doing. I at least want my plan to succeed.
âI see. Send it to Congress.Iâll sign the authorization once theyâve agreed with it,â I said. Dr. Fischer gave me a salute and typed in some letters to send it the Congress
âIâve got some business to take care of, shall we talk later?â I asked him.
âOf course, sir.â he said and let me leave. I walked back to the oval office to see Dr. Santos standing next to my desk, waiting for me to arrive.
âGood afternoon, sir.â he greeted me and I did the same to him. âWe know you want our robot population to increase so weâve been finding some volunteers who are willing to transmute their bodyâs into a robot.â he explained to me. âThereâs a girl I want you to meet. I think she would be a good contribution.â He lead me into a small room to meet the girl.
Well I don't understand why you can't just give me an honest answer. I'm fine with whatever you say.
Answer
Your story presents some interesting and original ideas. This is part of the creative process. I jot ideas down all the time but by themselves they are not a story. Beyond the creative process, the story must be supported by some technical practicalities.
Rhetoric is the study of communication, often in speeches and writing. A big part of it is the techniques to convince people. Your story is not an argument but you are trying to convince people to read it. You are trying to convince people to admire or enjoy it.
To do these things it is basic to eliminate whatever is distracting. Sometimes it can be like makeup to cover up a blemish but often it is just a clean and orderly presentation.
In the first two sentences you used the word "to" three times. Repeating the same kind of construction or even the same words can be enough to make someone go to sleep. It might be like wearing all plaid, socks, skirt, blouse. It might be fine as a uniform or costume but it is not by itself interesting. It is human nature to like patterns but we easily lose details and interest in constantly repeating patterns.
When it is at the beginning of a story someone may wonder if they should continue. In two of the instances you should probably said what you needed to in a different way or used the word, "at."
Any writing also must have some structure or framework. We don't usually tell the ending at the beginning but in the cases where this is done it is clear it is the ending and then there is some reasonable progression. It is very common to write in a sort of stream of consciousness. Much like a jumble of ideas things can come out of us as we go from one inspiration to another. It is the job of the writer acting as the first editor to make some sense of this jumble and weave it into a dance of words. Your words haven't yet learned to dance.
Sometimes we just need to slow down a bit and concentrate on a very small part of the story. The ideas you have written so far could be a chapter or even the theme for an entire book.
Most of the time I am writing non-fiction but if you want to see an example of making a story out of a piece of non-fiction you can look here: http://cleantechnica.com/2012/03/08/offshore-wind-the-21st-century-frontier/ or here: http://cleantechnica.com/2012/07/29/a-200-mile-date-with-a-2012-mitsubishi-i-ev/
Best of luck to you.
Your story presents some interesting and original ideas. This is part of the creative process. I jot ideas down all the time but by themselves they are not a story. Beyond the creative process, the story must be supported by some technical practicalities.
Rhetoric is the study of communication, often in speeches and writing. A big part of it is the techniques to convince people. Your story is not an argument but you are trying to convince people to read it. You are trying to convince people to admire or enjoy it.
To do these things it is basic to eliminate whatever is distracting. Sometimes it can be like makeup to cover up a blemish but often it is just a clean and orderly presentation.
In the first two sentences you used the word "to" three times. Repeating the same kind of construction or even the same words can be enough to make someone go to sleep. It might be like wearing all plaid, socks, skirt, blouse. It might be fine as a uniform or costume but it is not by itself interesting. It is human nature to like patterns but we easily lose details and interest in constantly repeating patterns.
When it is at the beginning of a story someone may wonder if they should continue. In two of the instances you should probably said what you needed to in a different way or used the word, "at."
Any writing also must have some structure or framework. We don't usually tell the ending at the beginning but in the cases where this is done it is clear it is the ending and then there is some reasonable progression. It is very common to write in a sort of stream of consciousness. Much like a jumble of ideas things can come out of us as we go from one inspiration to another. It is the job of the writer acting as the first editor to make some sense of this jumble and weave it into a dance of words. Your words haven't yet learned to dance.
Sometimes we just need to slow down a bit and concentrate on a very small part of the story. The ideas you have written so far could be a chapter or even the theme for an entire book.
Most of the time I am writing non-fiction but if you want to see an example of making a story out of a piece of non-fiction you can look here: http://cleantechnica.com/2012/03/08/offshore-wind-the-21st-century-frontier/ or here: http://cleantechnica.com/2012/07/29/a-200-mile-date-with-a-2012-mitsubishi-i-ev/
Best of luck to you.
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